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Nightedge Jun 15th, 2015 10:13 am

Please submit with Japanese and English names
 
A notice to invite contributions says

-Please submit with Japanese and English names to the Environmental Campaign Committee Secretariat, or fax to us at 28278138.

Do you think

1. 'English names' is wrong, because eg Tamaki Suo is a Japanese name, not an English name, which 'Tom/Peter' is, and so the sentence should be 'name in English'.

2. 'submit...' and 'fax to us' are wrong, because you must have objects after 'submit' and 'fax', and the sentence should be 'Please submit your contributions, with your name in Japanese and English, to the Environmental Campaign Committee Secretariat, or fax them to us at 28278138.

susan53 Jun 16th, 2015 04:02 am

Re: Please submit with Japanese and English names
 
I certainly prefer your version, but there's nothing wrong with the original. English names is comprehensible in the context, while the objects of the verbs are simply elided as they would be comprehensible from the context. You haven't provided the full context, but you say that it is an "notice to invite contributions". So it must previously have been made clear what those contributions were. You have simply restated everything - which is not a bad thing in terms of style and clarity. The original writer took it for granted that the co-text would allow the reader to infer what was to be faxed/submitted.

So - it's not a matter of "right" or "wrong" but just of which style of communication is more suited to the context and, ultimately, more effective.

Nightedge Jun 17th, 2015 01:17 am

Re: Please submit with Japanese and English names
 
Good answer. Thank you.


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